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Saint-Lazare's avatar

Intoxicating at all levels. I wish I could restack every sentence. Gee, Annie, that was wild, I'm directly heading for part 2.

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Annieguile Bentulan's avatar

Thank you Laz!!! For your kind words and for reading!!

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Saint-Lazare's avatar

My pleasure, truly.

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Asteria Geisterblum's avatar

It’s been five minutes since I finished and I’m still on my toes

Outdone yourself! Absolutely devoured this

The way things pace and flow is just incredible and the narration had me absolutely choked up

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Apis Dea's avatar

Excellent. You have a talent to show the moment and characters. You had me guessing to the end. Great forward motion, which must be challenging given that backseats are so cramped : ) I look forward to part 2.

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Annieguile Bentulan's avatar

Thank you for reading!! 🫶🫶🫶

I hope I deliver til the end.

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Colleen Bent's avatar

This was good. I find I end up skimming when I read longer pieces here. But I didn't. I read every word.

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MundaneMarvels's avatar

Wow, Annieguile, your storytelling is absolutely captivating! You’ve managed to take us deep into Ezra’s mind, painting a vivid picture of obsession and unraveling emotional dynamics. The pull between him and Noelle is intense, with layers of tension that keep readers like me hooked.

I especially admire how you’ve crafted Ezra’s character—his inner turmoil feels so raw and authentic, and the moments between him and Noelle are charged with complexity. It’s intriguing how Noelle remains elusive, adding to her mystique while leaving us questioning her motivations.

Looking forward to Part 2 and seeing just how far Ezra’s unraveling goes. Your ability to capture raw emotion and the lies we tell ourselves makes this story truly compelling. Keep up the amazing work!

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Colleen Bent's avatar

I noticed two errors, but I don't know how to DM you so it doesn't line up here.

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Annieguile Bentulan's avatar

Thank you for reading sent you a message instead.

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[ 2D ]'s avatar

Oh, the Meg Myers sealed the deal for me. *swoon!* Always with the good musical anchors. 🤍🔥

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